tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6176637429150603627.post1290238470435196773..comments2009-07-07T23:28:24.935+01:00Comments on The Wannabe Scribe: The Elevator Pitch Part IV addendumThe Wannabe Scribehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12119765280927528708noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6176637429150603627.post-79247847937199099882009-04-13T16:39:00.000+01:002009-04-13T16:39:00.000+01:00That's interesting Gabrielle. I'd never thought of...That's interesting Gabrielle. I'd never thought of it like that. I always write with a view to asking more questions than I answer, and an elevator pitch or query shouldn't be any different.<BR/><BR/>Thanks. :-)The Wannabe Scribehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12119765280927528708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6176637429150603627.post-64620226062988853552009-04-03T15:08:00.000+01:002009-04-03T15:08:00.000+01:00The tricky thing about the elevator pitch is givin...The tricky thing about the elevator pitch is giving information without giving too much information. You need very powerful phrases and you need to raise more questions than you answer. <BR/><BR/>"Hunted across the galaxy" is a powerful phrase that I'd be sorry to see you cut. It adds an urgency to your character's story in a way that someone hunting for clues doesn't. Being hunted means action happens. Searching for clues means, well, research happens. <BR/><BR/>"Before it can fall into the hands of a powerful religious cult" is not a powerful phrase. It answers too many questions that would otherwise leave someone wanting more. If you say that he's hunted, it'll be obvious that there's someone hunting him. Don't say who. Don't say why. Hook them, and make them ask you.<BR/><BR/>Gabriellegabriellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945421286534123354noreply@blogger.com