Most important of all is the fact that your character does not appear anywhere in the sentence, either by noun or pronoun.
Dwight V Swain
Well, silly me. If I didn't have my main character mentioned in the very first Motivation Unit. This is the first Motivation Unit that also happened to be not just the very first paragraph, not even just the first line, but the very first word!
Yes, this is the Chapter I've just completely rewritten using MRU's... Methinks I have a but more work to do.